I think not, and that's not because I don't think your summary is well written or persuasive. It's because I don't think many people read profile summaries any more, especially since LinkedIn recently changed the user interface.
Have you looked at your own profile or someone else's lately? The entire summary used to show at the top, drawing the reader's eye to it since it was right under the top box with your name, headline, and picture. Now it only shows the first two lines, and everything else is hidden under a "See more" link, which requires readers to a) notice it, and b) click it, in order to read your summary.
Based on my interactions with people in recent weeks - no one is doing that.
I include details about my service in the summary of my profile, including the types of clients I work with, my price range, contact info, etc. Before the change, I'm guessing maybe 30% of people who reached out to me had read it (based on the questions they asked). Now, maybe 5%, if that. I'm getting a LOT more people asking for my price range now than I ever did before because it's not something they can quickly see if they do skim my profile before writing.
(It's actually much the same with resumes - I've been saying for some time now that summaries aren't as important as most people think. They can still provide value to the reader if done right, but they're not a focus for recruiters. They're much more interested in your work history.)
So how does this impact you, especially if you're job searching?
Well, at the risk of stating the obvious, if you've got important information in the summary of your LinkedIn profile that you want visitors to see, they likely won't see it. So my advice is to make sure that your important information is contained elsewhere, such as the headline of your profile or in your employment history section. Far too many people load up their summary, going on and on about how talented they are, and then just plug some job titles and dates in their experience section, thinking that's good enough. It's not. Not even close.
So here's what you do:
Make your headline compelling:
Weed out the junk from your profile summary and focus on the facts (while also realizing it may not even be seen):
And make sure the experience section of your LinkedIn profile is filled out as best as possible:
Hope that helps!
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